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Review For Samantha

Story Title: Going Forward [ONE-SHOT]
Author: S.H.Y = Samantha
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/houa_1/
Status: Completed
Reviewer: Elena Mijares

Reviewer's Note: This review has nothing to do with any personal misunderstanding with the author or anything of that sort. This a honest review on a story. I'm seriously sorry if I'm harsh or rude.

Title: 4/5
*Your story title seemed to be different. It was simple but yet attractive.
Poster/Background: 9/10
*I loved your poster. The poster was so captivating. The background colour was suitable for the poster.
Forewords: 4/5
*Your forewords were brilliant. I spotted a few grammar mistakes in the forewords.
Plot: 8/15
*I’ve never read such an angst story before. The plot was filled with utter sadness. To create such a plot can be really hard. You’ve done a good job in portraying their sadness but you could have done better. Your main characters were ready to commit suicide because of their depression. So, you should have deepened the emotions and elaborated more.
Flow: 6/10
*Your story pace was balanced throughout most points of the story. Since it was a story depicting sadness, you’ve managed to make the story a bit dramatic.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 6/15
*You made quite a number of grammar and spelling mistakes. There were the same recurring mistakes. Your vocabulary is average. You should have picked more dramatic and exotic words to express the characters’ feelings.
Characterization: 5/10
*As I said before, you did a great job in portraying the story’s characters’ sadness, but, you didn’t elaborate much on the characters. You should explain more about the characters without breaking the suspense.
Originality: 7/10
*Your story seemed pretty original to me.
Writing style: 6/10
*I like your writing style. You used ordinary words and made them into interesting sentences. If you used much more interesting words, your story would’ve been more brilliant.
Overall enjoyment: 7/10
*I was curious when I was in the process of reading the story. I enjoyed it pretty much.
Overall score: 62/100

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