Review For MRSJAEJOONG
Author: MRSJAEJOONG
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/23/
Status: On-Going
Reviewer: Samantha
Title: 3/5
Well the title was a really good choice. Even though its used a lot. It also captured your readers and gave your readers an idea of what the story was going to be about.
Poster/Background: 4/10
I only liked the poster! I thought it was pretty! Even though it didn't look professionally done but it was still pretty. The background didn't match anything. I don't know why you added the background with the poster you made. And also the font was really hard to read I had to highlight everything for me to be able to read.
Forewords: 1/5
Well you didn't really write anything about your fic! You didn't add a plot/teaser, you didn't tell us about the background information. You told us the characters names but that it. it was a really bad foreword, there was nothing there! So I really think you should go back a fill it out! Tell us about the plot, characters so that you can capture the readers attention.
I gave you one point because you gave us the characters name.
Plot: 10/15
I read some plots like this before but you wrote it well! You added some things in there that was unique. Since I don't really read vampire stories it was good!
Flow: 7/10
I thought that the flow was a bit fast you didn't lengthen the story very well. It was somewhat sloppy. Since I don't know if all the things your wrote took place in one cay or not. Since you didn't really explain to us what the time was.
So you need to work on that!
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/15
There was some spelling mistakes here and there, but only small mistakes but its still distracting to the readers. Your vocabulary was basic you didn't use big words. You need to expand your vocabulary since its good to learn more words!
Characterization: 5/10
I don't really know about the characters personalities yet, you don't explain to us about the characters personalities.
and also the story was kind of fast so there was no time to introduce the characters like they should be.
Originality: 8/10
Like I said on the plot it wasn't really original but it was good. You added some things that were fresh so it was good.
Writing style: 8/10
Your writing style is so/so. You write with dialogue a lot. Its more of what the characters say. But you're really good with details. You add details for the readers so when they read the story they picture everything in their head. And I love detailed stories they are fun to read.
Overall enjoyment: 6/10
I thought that it was a good story. I kind of enjoyed it but not really!
Overall score: 62/100