Review for RAINxclouds
Author: RAINxclouds
Fanfic Url: http://winglin.net/fanfic/RATHER_/
Reviewed by Ms.McFartpants (ranee.pOts) @mysterious-souls1.blogspot.com
Note: I don't know the author and vice versa. If ever the comments given below are too harsh, I apologize for those HONEST comments are only given to improve the writer's writing skills. This review isn't given to offend the writer's point of views. This is my opinion and mine only. Thank you.
Story title: 3/5
;; No offense, but after reading the story, I was left dumbfounded. I didn't know whether the story made its own connection with the title but it was eye-catching though since most of the titles are more than one word.
Appearance: 8/10
;; The poster was good, no arguments on that! The background was really plain, but I'm not criticizing it. It was a perfect fit for the story's theme and also, the fonts were a big help.
Forewords: 7/10
;; I would be really honest with you, I really think that the forewords was kind of dull. The part that I loved the most in your forewords was the quotes or uhm, what do you call it anyway? Is it a preview or something like that? :) I'm sorry, I'm not good at fanfiction terms. He-he-he, anyway, I'm a type of reviewer that always looks at the forewords- ESPECIALLY the characters. I suggest you add a short introduction of the characters, especially the main ones.
Plot: 12/15
;; I seriously loved the plot, it wasn't totally that cliche. So there I was enjoying myself as I read through the first words of the story then bam! lots of questions passed through my head. Why did she die? Oh my gosh, why did Taemin ignore her? Then there the TV with the breaking news answered all of my questions. The story was really entertaining, and even though it's suppose to be the forewords' job, the beginning part of the plot made me want to read more :)
Characterization: 8/10
;; The characters were really in to their own personalities, no sudden changes happened both in the middle or in the end. Everyone remained in the same status until the story was thoroughly narrating until the end. The other characters were just confusing, but then I eventually realized that they're a circle of friends.
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
;; You're so creative, dear author! The characters were all original, and also none of them were predictable and no one brought the story down or wrecked it. But some of the scenes were quite too familiar for me, maybe I've read it from other stories.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10
;; Yes, you had some spelling and grammar mistakes! But that's no reviewer can change, right?
You wrote, "... even though Yunni made as much noice as possible."
You spelled noice wrong, it's suppose to be noise.
I also saw a simple typo error, it was typed 'wer' instead of 'were.'
There were also these vocabulary mistakes, example is with 'Jinki Oppa.'
It should be 'Jinki oppa,' with the word 'oppa' not capitalized since it's not a proper noun or it's not a part of his name. We only use it to formalize our greetings or whatsoever, but unless it's the first word of the sentence, then it shall be capitalized.
Flow: 10/10
;; In my opinion, the flow isn't really that a huge of a deal since it just tells whether the story is too fast or not. In this case, this story only focused on two scenes and that are the scene of Yunni hurting after seeing Taemin with another girl and Jinki's birthday. The rest were all just reminisced memories, like the part of how Yunni died while waiting for him.
Writing Style: 15/15
;; I'm not that big of a fan of spaces. Since we writers have our own styles, the hell I care about those spaces?! :D I shall give you a perfect 15 and you shall receive it with flying colors!
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
;; The ending was sad, so that makes not that that happy with it. But the plot was too interesting, I'll give you a 4.
Total : 81/100
Bonus : 3/5
;; 1 point because it's SHINee-based, another point because Yunni is here and another one because I just felt like giving you one. You deserve it! :D
Overall Total: 84/100